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Car Troubles




 “Noooo!” Lilly yelled. “What is wrong with me I can’t even pass one driving test.” This had been Lilly’s third driver’s test she didn’t pass. She took the test and ripped it in to little pieces. She looked around.

She heard a girl yell, ”yes! I did it!” behind her.

She looked over at her and glared. “No one cares!” she screamed. ”God.”

The girl ran off looking scared.

Lilly was 16 and she had beautiful blonde hair that glittered in the sun, she had blue eyes and she glowed whenever she came into the room. All of her friends wanted to be her. She lived in Florida where it was very hot.

Her mom Lisa was they’re waiting for her, she was always early. She drove a black BMW. “Sooo..Did you-” her mom whispered.

“No!” she cried, “I didn’t, I will be like the only one in my grade without a drivers license.”

“Honey that’s not true.” her mom insisted.  Her Mom always smelled like her clique happy perfume. She had dirty blonde hair and had brownish greenish eyes.

“Yes it is” she wined “Cant you help me or something?”

“I cant I have to much work this week, maybe next week.” Lisa said. She was always busy with her job.

“Never mind” Lilly said. She knew her mom would never teach her anyways.

“You’ll get it next time.” she smiled,” you’ll see.”  Lilly said nothing else the whole ride home.

When they got home, the house was the same as always, a big mansion, which looked like a castle. Lilly walked in, and her mom walked in after her.

“Kristi called,” Lisa said. “She wants to hang out.”

“Bye, I’m going over there,” she said walking out the door.

“I can drive-” she tried to tell her but she was already down the street.

She got to Kristi’s house, which was a few blocks down from hers. She had a big house to but not as big as Lilly’s. She walked to the door and rang the doorbell. No one answered for a long time, she rang it again nothing. She picked up her phone and dialed Kristi’s number. It rang and rang nothing. Where could she be? Than she saw Kristi walking down the street with a mad look on her face. She kicked a few flowers on the way. It looks like she was going to hurt someone. But once she got closer she broke down into tears. “What’s wrong?” she said.

“Someone stole my car!” she sniffed

“Are you serious” Lilly couldn’t believe it, “what are you going to do. “

“I have know idea,” Kristi said as she sat down on the curb and buried her face into her hands.

“How did it get stolen,” Lilly asked. Kristi had long brown hair and wore a green tank top, some jean shorts, and flip-flops from old navy. Her mascara was smeared all over her face.

“I left my keys in the car for one minute” she cried ”and then it was gone just like that,” she said.” And every thing was in there too!”

“That’s terrible”, Lilly said.

“I have no idea how I’m going to tell my parents.” Kristi looked so stressed.

“For now tell them you took it to the shop for some repairs.” Lilly suggested.

“Good idea that will buy me some time to figure out want to really say.” Kristi said, “oh, and why are you here anyway?”

“ You called and I just wanted to now if you wanted to hang out but I guess you are to busy so, I’ll see you later.” Lilly said.

“Okay well bye!” she waved and Lilly waved back. You could still hear her whispering to her self “I can’t believe I did that.”

Lilly walked back to her house feeling terrible for her friend Kristi.  She was feeling really guilty because she was so upset about not passing her driving test when her friend had a lot bigger problem.  She walked down the road that had large cracks in it. She heard a sound behind her she looked back, there was nothing there. Then all of a sudden she was falling. She had tripped on the curb walking backwards.

“Are you ok?” some guy yelled behind her. He had long brown hair, hazel green eyes, a blue surfer shirt and long brown shorts. She thought he was really cute.

She giggled a little as she got up and said, “yea I’m all right, and I’m Lilly”

“I’m Justin,” he grabbed her hand to help her. “I have to go but I’ll see you around?” he asked

“Yea definitely!” she smiled. She hoped she’d see him again.

The next day she went to the mall. She loved the mall she practically went there every day. Lilly loved shopping it was like her favorite hobby. She always got a ride with Kristi but she couldn’t because she didn’t have a car. So she just got a ride with her mom on the way to her mom’s work. She got to the mall and went strait to Juicy her favorite store. As she walked out of the mall with like a billion bags in her hands she felt someone’s warm soft hand pull on her arm. She turned around and saw Justin, the boy she bumped into yesterday and she thought was cute.  He was even cuter today and smelled really good. “Hey,” he said

“Hey what are you doing here,” she smiles really big. She could feel the butterflies in her stomach like she was going down a big rollercoaster.

“Nothing much I’m just hanging out with some of my friends.” He smiled back. “Hey maybe you and me could hangout some time.”

Before he could say anything else she quickly said “yes!” in a very high voice. She was so excited. He gave her a funny look. She tried not to look stupid so she said. “Yea I guess that would be cool” she smiled even bigger than before. She just couldn’t hold it in. “so maybe tomorrow” she shrugged.

“Yea that would be great” he said “I’ll pick you up at 7” he waved bye and walked back to his friends. Her week had just gotten better.

On the way out of the mall Lilly called Kristi.   “Hello” Kristi said.

“Hey” Lilly said, “Want to hang out” as her mom pulled up. She got in the car and drove away.

“Sure I’ll be over in a minute,” she said. Then she hung up.



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   terry wrote @ February 5th, 2009 at 3:39 pm

shannon um kinda short you could put more in to it go into lilly’s thought more tell kind of her life story about her family friends just add to it devolope your characters make it interesting.

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